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Title: Chapter Six:  Touch-Me-Nots
Pairing/Characters: Kal/Bruce, Barbara Gordon, Pete Ross, Ollie Queen, Martha Kent, Jonathan Kent
Notes: "The House of the Earth" is an AU in which a few thousand Kryptonians escaped the destruction of Krypton to flee to Earth and conquer its people.
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2400
Summary:  Kal and Bruce enjoy a few days in Smallville, but their time there is cut short.


For a few gilded days, Kal enjoyed life in Smallville.  He farmed with Jonathan, helped Martha with laundry, made furniture and played more "baseball" with Pete, took an archery lesson with Oliver and made everyone laugh with his complete incompetence.  His hands got dirty with soil, dust, and sweat.  Sometimes he would stare at them, at the dirt caught in the channels of his hands like dark paths;  the sight made him feel like Clark was real, like he was Clark.  He felt new parts of him opening like a flower to sunlight, parts he never knew he had.  The shy, reserved stranger he had been in school, in all his life, started to give way to a person with a talent for transplanting plants and soothing frightened sheep, a person who could joke and play, who could make Barbara laugh and Oliver roll his eyes.  Long days full of autumn sunlight, cool nights full of cricket song and starlight.

And Bruce.  Always Bruce.  They spent a fair amount of time apart with differing chores, but whenever they had free time Bruce was there, joking and insulting and talking about his childhood as he showed Kal how to start a fire with sticks, how to pick raspberries, how to skip stones.  Long walks along the creek lined with bright orange flowers.  "Touch-me-nots," Bruce said with a wry smile, showing Kal the seed pods that sprang apart at the lightest touch, flying to pieces, scattering.

Touch-me-nots.

Kal had never felt closer to Bruce then here, where they never touched.  The space between them was full of...something.  Maybe not friendship, but something.

And then one day he came in with Bruce through the back door and heard that space collapsing in on itself.

In the living room he heard a high, haughty voice.  "This plantation is crawling with filthy humans.  I counted at least a third again more than I ever purchased!  Jonathan, if you have been buying new slaves without my leave I shall--"

"Master Gur-Ko."  Jonathan's voice was tense with worry.  "I assure you that all is in order."  Martha was in the hall outside the living room, her hands pressed to her mouth, her face white.  The look she turned on Kal and Bruce was anguished, tight with fear.  In her pale gray eyes Kal could see it all falling apart, could see Gur-Ko finding the seed stores, the archives.  See Jonathan and Martha and everyone on the plantation carted away or executed on the spot.

"This kind of chaos and disorder is unacceptable.  I shall have to do a full check of the premises now to see what else you nasty little things have been doing." 

Martha shook her head numbly from side to side.  Bruce reached out to pat her back, his eyes filled with plans, possibilities, calculation.

And while he thought, Kal acted.

He reached up and wrenched the silvery slave collar from his neck, the collar nothing but Kryptonian strength could remove.  He put it in Martha's hands;  she stared at it.  "Stay here," he whispered. 

Then he lifted his feet from the worn wooden boards and floated into the living room.

Both Gur-Ko and Jonathan turned to face him, their eyes surprised for different reasons.  Gur-Ko--a fussy, older Kryptonian, his hands covered in white gloves, his nose turned up in a permanent fastidious sniff--broke off his tirade and glared at Kal in confusion.

Kal bowed slightly.  "My apologies, citizen.  The extra humans roaming the plantation are mine."

Gur-Ko's nose wrinkled as he took in the rough human clothing Kal was wearing;  Kal hoped there were no dirt or grass stains on them.  "You had no right--"

Kal drew himself up to a towering height.  "Do you know who I am, citizen?"

"N--No," said Gur-Ko hesitantly.

Thank Rao for that, thought Kal.  "Well, I am Van-Ve, and I work for Zhon-Mal.  Perhaps you have heard of him, citizen?"

"Oh yes.  Yes.  Zhon-Mal," stammered Gur-Ko.

"We're conducting a survey of food quality on the various Midwestern farms."

"I was not informed of such a thing," protested the other man.

"Oh?" Kal said mildly.  "Well, you may bring it up with Zhon-Mal later.  I believe tonight he is dining with his close personal friend, Zor-El.  Is that name familiar to you, citizen?"

Alarm and something close to fear skittered across Gur-Ko's face;  he cringed.  "Of course, honored sir.  Of course.  But this is highly out of order..."

He wasn't going to leave, Kal thought with a stab of panic.  He had to do something more.  Gur-Ko was wringing his gloved hands, looking uncomfortable, trapped, but stubbornly refusing to go.  He had to find some way to make the man leave.

"Bruce," he said loudly, clapping his hands together.

Bruce scurried into the room, his posture bent and crabbed, his eyes cast down.  Kal's heart twisted at the sight, but he bit down his chagrin, used it to turn his voice harder.  "Bruce, did I not tell you to keep all of my slaves in one place?  Why are they wandering free around the plantation?"

Bruce bowed deeply, nearly groveling.  "Master, forgive me.  I didn't think it would cause any harm..." 

He glanced up at Kal and as he looked up, Kal backhanded him across the mouth, one sharp blow.  The wet crack of impact turned Kal's stomach; he swallowed against a wave of nausea. Bruce went sprawling near Gur-Ko, and the Kryptonian pulled back with a squeak of panic.  "Did I give you leave to think, vermin?" snarled Kal.

There was a short, startled silence;  Kal saw Bruce touch his bloody lip, then scrub at his face, daubling scarlet across it.  Bruce shot him one brief glance that slid toward Gur-Ko.  "I'm sorry," he mumbled, his eyes locked back on Kal's, full of urgency and meaning.

Kal pounced forward, grabbing Bruce by the shirt collar and lifting him like a kitten.  Bruce's face was covered with blood;  saliva running down his chin.  Kal thrust the bloody human at Gur-Ko so their faces nearly touched.  "Yes, yes," Kal said, exasperation lacing his voice.  "Now apologize to our host."

"S--S--Sorry," Bruce managed, causing even more blood and saliva to run down his chin.  Gur-Ko shuddered, his eyes rolling.

Kal pushed Bruce to his knees.  "Kiss his robes," Kal said.

"No!" Gur-Ko cried, pulling back, his face white.  "No, that will not be necessary.  Not necessary at all.  Please."

Kal tossed Bruce aside like a rag.   "I'm so sorry," he said to Gur-Ko.  "I seem to have made a bit of a mess.  I shall have one of my reliable slaves clean it--which one is the one I mean, Bruce?"  He snapped his fingers impatiently, not looking at the man on the floor.  "You know.  The tall one.  With the hair."

"Oliver?" said Bruce from the floor.

"Right!  That one.  He's a genius with stains."  He smiled at Gur-Ko.  "And you may send Zhon-Mal the bill for what you think is reasonable recompense when you get back to Kryptonopolis."

"Back to--back--"  Gur-Ko seized on the phrase like a lifeline.  "Yes, I'll be going back now."  Bruce made a horrible drooling spitting noise and Gur-Ko shuddered all over, gagging.  He backed out of the room, keeping an eye on Bruce as if he were a dangerous animal, and was gone.

For a long time no one in the living room moved, remembering the sharpness of Kryptonian hearing.  In the doorway Kal could see Martha, her eyes wide, holding his abandoned collar.  Jonathan was staring at him.  Bruce was still looking down, wiping at his mouth, his hands covered with his own blood.  Kal's eyes were burning, his face was burning.  He wanted to be sick.  He wanted to fly away, to bury himself in the earth if it would have him.  No one moved.

Pete came bursting through the door.  "He's gone, he--"  He stopped dead, looking at the tableau, Kal floating in the middle of the room.  "What the hell happened?"

: : :

"That was brilliant!"  Bruce's grin threatened to widen the split on his lip.

"Please hold still," said Kal, dabbing at the nasty wound.

"Totally caught him off guard. Wham," Bruce said gleefully, mimicking Kal's backhand. "When I heard him squeal, I realized what you were up to. Brilliant, just brilliant."

"Don't," Kal said, looking down at his hands.

"Don't what?  That was perfect, Kal.  I was a little afraid you wouldn't think of shaking me in his face like that, but you got the hint.  I was lying there on the floor almost trying not to laugh at the poor bastard, we got him so good.  Man," he said with relish.  "That was great."  He frowned at Kal's expression.  "What's the matter?"

"I promised I'd never hurt you," Kal said.

"What?"  Bruce seemed honestly surprised. 

"I promised," Kal muttered.

There was a hand on his chin, forcing his face up to meet Bruce's gaze.  "It would have hurt me a hell of a lot more to see my friends executed and this outpost destroyed, Kal.  We have to make hard choices sometimes.  You did the smart thing."

Kal daubed petroleum jelly onto his fingers and smoothed it onto the broken lip;  Bruce flinched a little, then relaxed into the touch.  Kal got a little more of the clear balm and applied it again, his fingers tracing the line of Bruce's lower lip slowly.  Bruce exhaled, a long slow breath that brushed at Kal's fingers.  Kal finished following the line of Bruce's lower lip and traced the curve of his upper lip, very lightly;  Bruce's eyes drifted half-closed and he drew in a slightly shaky breath.

Kal pulled his hand back and put the lid on the balm, trying to steady his own breathing.  "Are you all right?"  Bruce asked.  When Kal looked up in surprise, he went on with a small smile, "Did you hurt your hand on my head?"  Kal didn't have time to answer before Bruce was taking his hand in his, tracing along the knuckles with exaggerated care, a feather-light touch.

Kal felt like he was falling apart, scattering to the wind, splintered with yearning.  "I think I'm okay," he managed.

"Much more than okay," Bruce said, but he let go of his hand with a small smile.

There was a knock at the door and it opened to reveal Martha, a plate of cookies and two glasses of milk balanced on her arms.  "I thought you might need some fortification after all that," she said cheerfully.

Kal felt the stab of shame go through him again;  exposed as a Kryptonian, an enslaver, an alien conquerer.  To know that she and Jonathan and Pete would never see him the same way again...he felt walls going up all around him, blocking him in.  "Thank you," he whispered, "And I'm sorry."

Martha chuckled.  "Sorry?  For saving us all?"

"Sorry for lying to you."

Martha put her hands on her hips and frowned at him.  "Lying to us?"

"About being human."

At that, she threw her head back and laughed.  "Oh Clark," she said, wiping her eyes, "Jonathan and I knew all along you were a Kryptonian.  It wasn't some kind of secret."

Kal stared at her.  "You knew?  But you didn't say anything."

Another frown creased her forehead.  "We didn't feel it was necessary.  What difference did it make?"  She pointed to the plate of cookies as Kal gaped.  "Don't let those go to waste."  Then she marched out of the room.

Bruce grabbed a cookie, then shrugged a little sheepishly at the look Kal turned on him.  "I was afraid if you knew they knew it would make it harder for you to relax."

"Everyone knew?"

Bruce shook his head as he gingerly took a bite of cookie.  "Just Jonathan and Martha."

"Oh."  Kal felt worry close in on him again.

Bruce grimaced.  "It won't matter to everyone."

"But it will to some."

"I won't lie and tell you otherwise," Bruce said with a sigh.  He turned to look at the window at the sun setting in the west.  "I guess it's time we move on to our final stop anyway," he said softly.  "But it was a good time here, wasn't it?"

Kal remembered the smell of the earth, the crack of a ball against a bat, the taste of raspberries.  Touch-me-nots under his curious fingers, springing outward into the unknown future.  "It was."

: : :

The morning skies were graying as Kal and Bruce piled into the truck again.  Jonathan, Martha, and Barbara were there:  Martha hugged them both and Jonathan clasped their hands.  "There's always work here if you want to come back, son," he said to Kal, and Kal swallowed and nodded.

Barbara's hug was more tentative, more hesitant.  Kal couldn't really blame her;  after what she'd been through he was surprised she came to say goodbye at all.  The walnut dye was starting to give way to her natural red again.  "Take care," she whispered.

Bruce was starting up the truck when there was a yell from down the street.  Kal looked to see Oliver and Pete arriving at a gallop.  "You're not getting away without saying goodbye to us," Oliver said, thumping them both on the back.

Pete hung back a bit, eyeing Kal.  He scuffed one toe in the dirt for a bit.  "You could have said something," he muttered.  "I feel like an idiot."

"I'm sorry," said Kal.

Pete stepped forward and gave him an awkward hug.  "Thanks for everything."

"No, thank you," Kal said.  Pete looked up at him.  "For...showing me around.  Letting me play baseball."

"I guess you let us win at that," Pete said.

Kal couldn't help a startled laugh.  "Are you kidding?  I never figured out the damn rules!"  Everyone else laughed, and after a moment Pete joined in.

"Time to go," said Bruce.  Kal hopped into the car. 

Everyone waved as the truck pulled away from Smallville and turned onto the road heading west.

"How's it feel to have friends?" Bruce asked.

Kal watched the farm dwindle away behind them, reluctant to turn his face west just yet.  "It felt good," he said.

"You don't need to use the past tense," said Bruce.  He reached out with one hand and slapped Kal's head.  "Dork."



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Date: 2009-03-21 04:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cursor-mundi.livejournal.com
Ok, so this was great, and you really had me worried about whether Clark/Kal would think on his feet (or float...whatever!) and do the smart thing versus the noble thing, but that last line? It KILLED me. I totally wasn't expecting it and works so well!

Dork. Hee! *wanders off, snickering*

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Date: 2009-03-21 08:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
that last line? It KILLED me. I totally wasn't expecting it and works so well!

Men insulting each other as a sign of friendship is like this strange alien thing to me, but it's always fun to write. :) Plus it gave Bruce an excuse to touch Kal just for a moment. *sighs* Boys...

Glad you liked it!

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Date: 2009-03-21 04:11 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bradygirl_12
Wow! fantastic chapter, Mithen! :)

Kal's quick thinking, Bruce picking up on it, and the two of them working together was great!

Oh, the Kents! *loves them so*

I'm glad that everyone did accept Kal, hesitancy and all for some of them. The poor guy needs friends! And it's no surprise he felt guilty about Bruce.

No matter what universe, Kal always has a gentle spirit. :)

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Date: 2009-03-21 08:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
My favorite part of this arc has been seeing Kal and Bruce working together, sometimes even without having to talk about it, learning to understand how each of them thinks. It puts them on a more canonical footing and makes me happy. :)

The Kents also made me happy--I suspect they've been running interference for him if someone shows up and says "Your son sure doesn't know much about human society..."

No matter what universe, Kal always has a gentle spirit. :)

He'll always do what he has to, but he certainly doesn't enjoy hurting people he cares about, poor guy...

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Date: 2009-03-21 05:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vespa331.livejournal.com
These last couple chapters have been extra wonderful. I especially love Jonathan and Martha turning Smallville into a sanctuary, and Oliver was great. And oh-so-shy Bruce spending time with Clark, so cute!
Bruce's fear of being complacently happy was amazing.

Oh, and your Aquaman icon is adorkable! Arthur's the character I'm most torn on in B+B - he's a fantastic character, but he's not like any Aquaman I've ever read. Funny as hell though.

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Date: 2009-03-21 09:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I especially love Jonathan and Martha turning Smallville into a sanctuary, and Oliver was great.

I like to think given the chance Jonathan and Martha would make some sort of safe spot. They're tough folks. Oliver was fun to write! He shows up now and then and demands to be in storie, and I rarely say no. :)

B&B Aquaman is hysterical and I love him, all the while just shaking my head and going "Somewhere in the comic books, the real Arthur is cringing and snarling at being portrayed as a lovable buffoon." But he's SUCH a good foil to Batman that I can't resist him!

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Date: 2009-03-21 05:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] confusedkayt.livejournal.com
Ack! Oh man. No matter how giddy Bruce is at success, I just *ache* for Clark. I am sure sure that J'onn's words are echoing through him at this point. SO long as he can toss Bruce around like a rag doll, so long as he's *expected* to...

Ouch, is all.

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Date: 2009-03-21 11:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
Oh man. No matter how giddy Bruce is at success, I just *ache* for Clark.

I totally agree with you, and it was really hard for me to write. Bruce had to be so positive about it, or I think Kal would have just shattered into a thousand pieces, poor guy. Yes, it's a harsh moment, and it was so hard for him to swallow...not just his pride, but his yearning to be Bruce's equal, and use the reality to get them out of the mess.

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Date: 2009-03-21 05:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jlvsclrk.livejournal.com
Hurray for Clark's fast thinking and Bruce's great acting. I was giggling like mad at the idea of Gor-Ko frantically trying to get away from the bloody / sweaty / spitting human.

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Date: 2009-03-21 11:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I was giggling like mad at the idea of Gor-Ko frantically trying to get away from the bloody / sweaty / spitting human.

I was so torn during that scene--I felt awful for Clark, but I have to admit part of me was really enjoying Bruce's very deliberate "Oh, I can drool more! That'd be cool! Hm, I wonder if I could manage to vomit on him..."

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Date: 2009-03-21 05:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] juniper617.livejournal.com
"Dork." LOL Brilliant!

Hurray for Kal for his quick thinking, and I loved how he and Bruce played off each other (very Kirk/Spock dynamic there!).

I can imagine Kal's heartache as he made the choice to hit Bruce, for the greater good. Now he's truly a part of the resistance; he'll never suffer the physical hardships that the humans do, but he's had a brutal object lesson in how to function in a situation where your choices are 'shitty' and 'slightly less shitty.' Excuse my language, I couldn't really think of an appropriate term to describe the Kryptonian conquerers.

So, turning point for Kal, and progress in Bruce and Kal's relationship. Great update!

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Date: 2009-03-21 11:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
Hurray for Kal for his quick thinking, and I loved how he and Bruce played off each other (very Kirk/Spock dynamic there!).

Hey, that's a good way of putting it! You're right, Kirk and Spock are always pulling this kind of "putting on a show" thing, usually without even needing to discuss it. *happy grin*

Oh, and I love that you describe this as the moment he becomes truly part of the resistance; that's exactly how I saw it my mind, the moment where he has to put aside his squeamishness and personal feelings to do what has to be done. Bruce definitely sees it that way too...and the results of that show up in the next chapter, ho ho. Thanks so much for the feedback, I'm going to be grinning about the Kirk/Spock all day now. :D

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Date: 2009-03-21 02:49 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I'm not sure I'm awake enough to do this but I'll try.

"And Bruce. Always Bruce."

Melts. Plus that is so true of most universes they're in. Even if only in friendship. Or semi-enemies or antagonists like Frank Millar's "The Dark Knight Returns" (not my favourite version nor example).

""Touch-me-nots," Bruce said with a wry smile, showing Kal the seed pods that sprang apart at the lightest touch, flying to pieces, scattering."

Eeeee! A flower is a metaphor for Bruce. I love it. I never would of thought it. It also is representing their current relationship. How did your Batman muse react? ;-)

Do you have a link to the type of Touch-me-not's you described? Because there are more than one. I assume it's one of the Impatiens. 'Cos they're in North America; I even saw a blue one from Tibet. Plus a different species, Mimosa pudica, from Central and South America that's like a pink dandelion (not exactly the same). Even though it's the wrong one it would amuse me if Batman and it were juxtiposed somehow. Hee (hides from the Bat).

"He wanted to be sick. He wanted to fly away, to bury himself in the earth if it would have him. "

Hugs everyone especially Clark. I couldn't comment on the rest of the scene as it's too painful.

""That was brilliant!" Bruce's grin threatened to widen the split on his lip."

I could kiss Bruce here. Or just threaten to 'cos it might be safer. ;-)

""I promised I'd never hurt you," Kal said."

Hugs Kal.

""Are you all right?" Bruce asked. When Kal looked up in surprise, he went on with a small smile, "Did you hurt your hand on my head?" "

Hee. I just love Bruce here. As well as what he said and how he reacted above this.

"Kal felt like he was falling apart, scattering to the wind, splintered with yearning. "I think I'm okay," he managed.

"Much more than okay," Bruce said, but he let go of his hand with a small smile."


Hee. Love this.

""Sorry for lying to you."

Martha put her hands on her hips and frowned at him. "Lying to us?"

"About being human.""


Oh Kal. Hugs him. I love Martha and Jonathan even more for how they treated and just accepted him.

""How's it feel to have friends?" Bruce asked.

Kal watched the farm dwindle away behind them, reluctant to turn his face west just yet. "It felt good," he said.

"You don't need to use the past tense," said Bruce. He reached out with one hand and slapped Kal's head. "Dork.""


Heh. Perfect ending to the chapter. Although I'm wondering how many people know about Clark's outing on the farm. Everyone? Or just a few? I suspect everyone there due to gossip alone.

Angeloz

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Date: 2009-03-21 03:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
Eeeee! A flower is a metaphor for Bruce. I love it. I never would of thought it. It also is representing their current relationship. How did your Batman muse react? ;-)

*grin* He was...wry. Resigned to being compared to a bright-colored and explosive weed. :D

And yes, the one I'm thinking of is the Impatiens family (the name alone is wonderful!), also called jewelweed:


They're common in swampy areas where I grew up and [livejournal.com profile] damos says he remembers them in Kansas as well.

I could kiss Bruce here. Or just threaten to 'cos it might be safer. ;-)

Somewhat ironically, I think Bruce was tempted to kiss Kal there but for once was discouraged by phsyical considerations rather than mental. :)

Hee. I just love Bruce here. As well as what he said and how he reacted above this.

He really was doing his best to downplay Kal's reaction, and I love him for that.

Oh Kal. Hugs him. I love Martha and Jonathan even more for how they treated and just accepted him.

They were wonderful to write here...Martha was all breezy and relaxed about it. "Hey, you just saved all our lives, I'm not quibbling." :)

Although I'm wondering how many people know about Clark's outing on the farm. Everyone? Or just a few? I suspect everyone there due to gossip alone.

I strongly suspect everyone knew by then, which is why they left quickly and quietly. I love Pete here, but I think he would have been too shocked to not tell some other people, and it would have spread fast. That's probably why he's feeling a little chagrined as well as angry with Kal there.

I did like Bruce getting to whack Kal at the end, however symbolically. :) *hugs* Glad you liked it, I love seeing what struck you and how...

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Date: 2009-03-21 11:46 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
It's a weed? Hee so he's even more like the Scarlet Pimpernal (he calls it a small wayside flower if I remember correct). Too bad him being rich isn't part of his disguise in this universe. By the way you can find the pink one in Wikipedia. Thanks for the picture. Too bad I can't do the same.

"Somewhat ironically, I think Bruce was tempted to kiss Kal there but for once was discouraged by phsyical considerations rather than mental. :)"

I love that even more. Thank you for telling me (and everyone). So he just needs the right conditions and encouragement. Good to know.

Angeloz

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Date: 2009-03-22 10:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com

It's a weed? Hee so he's even more like the Scarlet Pimpernal (he calls it a small wayside flower if I remember correct).


Ahhh, that's such a great comparison! Whee! (I really need to read the book or watch the movie sometime!)

I saw the pink dandelion-looking one while looking for that picture and giggles...I think Bruce would have been less sanguine about that one.

I'm having a really hard time "reading" Bruce in this story, more so than usual since I'm not writing his POV. I usually have a decent idea of what he's thinking, but not as clearly as usual, which is frustrating...but since it echoes Kal's uncertainty I've been running with it.

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Date: 2009-03-22 01:05 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I can recommend the 1982 version with Anthony Andrews, Jane Seymour and even better Sir Ian McKellen (Gandalf and Magneto) as the villain. It has stuff in it from another novel "Eldorado" which I've never read to be honest (I found it interesting). Not all the novels are easily available in libraries even where I live (some are but not all). But the first one is a classic as you know which I have. Another classic film is the 1934 version with Leslie Howard and Merle Oberon (B&W). I don't think it's completely faithful if I remember correctly though don't let that put you off. If you do read it I suspect you'll love it. Especially as it's written by a woman and has a woman protagonist in it that is as strong as the Scarlet Pimpernal. I don't know how much you know so I don't want to spoil it. It's satisfying from male and female points of view. I know you like romances or did and this is one of the best. I guess I should stop now. You hit a button. A nice one. Thanks.

P.S. - I even love Zorro. Not that I've seen many of the films or its's been years (I loved one of the TV series from the nineties but was introduced with one of the B&W films). Wait wasn't this about some guys called Bruce and Kal? Again thanks for the insights about them even if one of them isn't very talkative.

Angeloz

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Date: 2009-03-22 02:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I bought a whole bunch of classic swashbuckling movies a while back and I know I've got Zorro and I think I might have Pimpernel? But I didn't know about the 1982 version and will definitely look that up! [livejournal.com profile] vigilante_wake has mentioned she'd like to write soem Scarlet Pimpernel fanfiction...I totally should read it so I can harass her about it.

And anything about the Scarlet Pimpernel and Zorro is really about Bruce and Kal anyway, since they're definite forerunners. Batman is a fascinating mix of those two and the Shadow...so I'm always interested in learning more!

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Date: 2009-03-21 06:12 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bradygirl_12
Oh Kal. Hugs him. I love Martha and Jonathan even more for how they treated and just accepted him.

That's pretty much the cornerstone of their relationship in every 'verse.

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Date: 2009-03-21 11:17 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I agree and I was too tired to say that. But I think they were above and beyond wonderful here. Due to - the aliens have taken over and enslaved the planet but we're not going to hold that against him. Nope we're going to love and accept him. Also encourage him. Plus cookies. ;-)

Angeloz

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Date: 2009-03-22 12:41 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bradygirl_12
LOL! Cookies always makes things better (especially Martha's). ;)

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Date: 2009-03-21 06:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zenithjolt.livejournal.com
:D

This chapter was brilliant, i loved Bruce here so much, all giddy and cheerful. Three cheers for Clark! lol. The Kents knew his secret! i loved that bit. This was a great ending:

'"You don't need to use the past tense," said Bruce. He reached out with one hand and slapped Kal's head. "Dork."'

--Lol, update soon!

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Date: 2009-03-22 12:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
i loved Bruce here so much, all giddy and cheerful.

Bruce kind of surprised me here! But in part he's just very happy that Kal is willing to be pragmatic and do what's necessary. He's always known/suspected that Kal would die for the cause, but would he be willing to get his hands dirty, both physically and morally? Bruce was pleased with the results. :)

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Date: 2009-03-21 07:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] starsandsea.livejournal.com
Sometimes he would stare at them, at the dirt caught in the channels of his hands like dark paths; the sight made him feel like Clark was real, like he was Clark. He felt new parts of him opening like a flower to sunlight, parts he never knew he had.

*pets Clark!* I can say Clark now? Maybe? *pets him*

Kal had never felt closer to Bruce then here, where they never touched. The space between them was full of...something. Maybe not friendship, but something.

*pets them both*

"Master Gur-Ko." Jonathan's voice was tense with worry. "I assure you that all is in order."

Eeeeeeeeeeeep!!! *hides everyone*

"This kind of chaos and disorder is unacceptable. I shall have to do a full check of the premises now to see what else you nasty little things have been doing."

Meeeeeep!!! *hides everyone and everything even more*

Thank Rao for that, thought Kal.

Hee.

He glanced up at Kal and as he looked up, Kal backhanded him across the mouth, one sharp blow. The wet crack of impact turned Kal's stomach; he swallowed against a wave of nausea.

Eeeep! *huggles them both*

"You know. The tall one. With the hair."

Hee! I think that is one of the best descriptions of Ollie! :p

Bruce made a horrible drooling spitting noise

Heh. *pets Bruce*

Kal's eyes were burning, his face was burning. He wanted to be sick. He wanted to fly away, to bury himself in the earth if it would have him. No one moved.

*huggles Kal*

"I promised I'd never hurt you," Kal said.

*huggles Kal again*

"It would have hurt me a hell of a lot more to see my friends executed and this outpost destroyed, Kal. We have to make hard choices sometimes. You did the smart thing."

*pets Bruce*

Kal felt like he was falling apart, scattering to the wind, splintered with yearning. "I think I'm okay," he managed.

*pets Kal*

Kal felt the stab of shame go through him again; exposed as a Kryptonian, an enslaver, an alien conquerer. To know that she and Jonathan and Pete would never see him the same way again...he felt walls going up all around him, blocking him in. "Thank you," he whispered, "And I'm sorry."

*huggles Kal*

At that, she threw her head back and laughed. "Oh Clark," she said, wiping her eyes, "Jonathan and I knew all along you were a Kryptonian. It wasn't some kind of secret."

Heh. *hearts Martha and Jonathan*

"I guess it's time we move on to our final stop anyway," he said softly. "But it was a good time here, wasn't it?"

Kal remembered the smell of the earth, the crack of a ball against a bat, the taste of raspberries. Touch-me-nots under his curious fingers, springing outward into the unknown future. "It was."


*pets them*

Pete hung back a bit, eyeing Kal. He scuffed one toe in the dirt for a bit. "You could have said something," he muttered. "I feel like an idiot."

*pets Pete*

"You don't need to use the past tense," said Bruce. He reached out with one hand and slapped Kal's head. "Dork."

*pets Bruce*

Only two more chapters? No!! :(

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Date: 2009-03-22 12:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
*pets Clark!* I can say Clark now? Maybe? *pets him*

It's funny, I wanted at some point during their time in Smallville for Kal to begin thinking of himself as "Clark," but...he never got there. I think he'd need more time.

Hee! I think that is one of the best descriptions of Ollie! :p

Hee, that line is totally [livejournal.com profile] damos's. It cracked me up.

And poor Pete! It's a measure of his basic goodness that he wasn't really furious. I'd feel like such a tool, knowing I'd been chumming around with someone who'd only been pretending to be human. But I think Pete realizes he's basically a good person and is willing to settle at "chagrined."

Only two more chapters! And then only one more arc! And I think the last chapter still needs some work, too... *looks worried*

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Date: 2009-03-21 09:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brushed-velvet.livejournal.com
Argh, the tension! Yay for Kal/Clark for taking charge like that, Bruce is definitely rubbing off on him - lol.

I know Bruce was caught up in the success of their staged scene but when he mimicked Kal's backhand I was like 'Bruce, ease off, you dunderhead!' because ouch! Poor Kal.

Your comment that Bruce was being so positive to help stop Kal falling apart does put it into a lot of context but still. I suppose Bruce forgets that because he can take harsh punishment easier than others, for the greater good, it's still sickening to Kal to dish it out.

And oh, the UST is thrilling me and killing me simultaneously.

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Date: 2009-03-22 01:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I know Bruce was caught up in the success of their staged scene but when he mimicked Kal's backhand I was like 'Bruce, ease off, you dunderhead!' because ouch! Poor Kal.

I agree, and I winced. I think it's because he had no moral qualms about it whatsoever and was in fact afraid Kal wouldn't do it, so he was so relieved after. You put it well, that Bruce is so blase about getting hurt he doesn't really think about how much it hurt Kal to do it.

Also, yay UST! \o/ I'm having lots of fun with it.

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Date: 2009-03-22 12:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skund.livejournal.com
Hehe, I love the notion that Martha's idea of "fortification" is milk and cookies!

The scene with Gor-Ko was great (especially with the revelation that Bruce was almost laughing all the way through it). I'm sad to see the boys move on from the farm, Clark was just starting to discover himself. But new adventures await!

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Date: 2009-03-22 10:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I wish they could stay longer too. T_T He was just starting to get the hang of himself. I hope to find some space in the final arc as well, somewhere, that they can work from.

Martha makes me laugh, she always treats the boys like...well, boys. :D

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Date: 2009-03-22 02:47 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
wow. I never saw that coming.

Point to Kal for defusing the situation so effectivly. It could have been such a disaster. Shudder.

I liked that Bruce's reaction was " man this was so cool" and Kal was "I can't believe I did this, I want to throw up"
I guess Bruce is proud that his student can stand on his own now. I wonder if he would have been as unaffected if he had been the one backanding someone across the room.

One line that caught my attention is Kal picking up Bruce like a kitten. Bruce is such a force of nature that we forget how frail he actually is compared to kryptonians. It had another twisted layer to the master/slave dynamic. Not only is Kal allowed to do anything to Bruce but he could snap him in half without even trying, Bruce however would have a hard time defending himself.

Is it comon for masters to get pissed at their slaves and to kill them without even meaning to by striking them in anger ?

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Date: 2009-03-22 01:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I liked that Bruce's reaction was " man this was so cool" and Kal was "I can't believe I did this, I want to throw up"
I guess Bruce is proud that his student can stand on his own now. I wonder if he would have been as unaffected if he had been the one backanding someone across the room.


I suspect not...especially someone with such a relative power imbalance. He can take it, but he'd have a hard time dishing it out. :)

It had another twisted layer to the master/slave dynamic. Not only is Kal allowed to do anything to Bruce but he could snap him in half without even trying, Bruce however would have a hard time defending himself.

Yeah, and I do think it's probably pretty common for Kryptonians to "break" their humans. Unlike a lot of societies with slavery, humans are very easy to replace...people with special skills would be valuable, but your average iao-picker or food-server is probably not worth pulling your blows on. Which is a terrifying thought and I really couldn't bear to write Kryptonians snapping peoples' spines carelessly, but...I suspect it happens.

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Date: 2009-03-22 04:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] snake-easing.livejournal.com
Noli me tangere...

Is hilarious that Jon and Martha already knew. Glad that Pete walked in too.

Bruce very compelling in the post-confrontation scene. Am worried though about Gur-Ko (Gor-Ko?). Even rudimentary checking on Kal's story will reveal the deception...

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Date: 2009-03-23 06:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
Bruce very compelling in the post-confrontation scene. Am worried though about Gur-Ko (Gor-Ko?). Even rudimentary checking on Kal's story will reveal the deception...

You've...picked up Rorshach's commenting style somewhere! Okay, the image of Rorshach reading and analyzing fanfiction is a terrifying one. :D

I suspect there actually is such a program (oddly, before I planned this at all I had a throwaway line about Zhon that indicated farming issues were his bailiwick)...and I think Zor-El's name is one that discourages questioning at all. But you're right, Zhon will probably have some scrambling to do to make sure things are covered...

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Date: 2009-03-24 10:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] snake-easing.livejournal.com
You've...picked up Rorshach's commenting style somewhere!

Is true! Am unable to resist unique and beautiful phrasing.

But you're right, Zhon will probably have some scrambling to do to make sure things are covered...

D'oh, forgot that Zhon was on their side! Kryptonite names... blending together.

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Date: 2009-03-22 06:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fictionalknight.livejournal.com
Yay for Kal taking action! But poor thing felt so awful about it later. aww! *hugs him* I loved Bruce's reaction afterwards, though, how impressed he was... :D Made me smile very much. (and oh, that whole bit with the petrol jelly...yum!)

This was a great chapter. I'm kind of sad they had to leave Smallville, though... Will be looking forward to the next chapter. :)

[tiny little note, btw - sometimes you call the other Kryptonian Gor-Ko and others you call him Gur-Ko... I figured you'd like to know.]

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Date: 2009-03-23 08:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
Gah about the Gur/Gor problem! I need to be more careful about my Kryptonian names, obviously...I do that a lot. Thanks for the heads-up, I think I've got it all consistent now.

This was a great chapter. I'm kind of sad they had to leave Smallville, though... Will be looking forward to the next chapter. :)

I was sorry they had to leave too! I really wanted to find them some time, but...they don't have a whole lot to spare, alas. (And oh, I do love to write them finding reasons to touch each other, lol).

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Date: 2009-03-25 02:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fictionalknight.livejournal.com
(And oh, I do love to write them finding reasons to touch each other, lol).

hehehe! :) And we love it when you do!

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Date: 2009-03-22 06:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] batfan-sarah.livejournal.com
*melts into a puddle*

oh my god, this was full of so much...everything!

the touch-me-nots (aka if bruce were a flower, lol), them possibly getting caught, kal having to save them by hurting bruce, patching bruce up with the touching and the yearning and the *touching*, and saying good bye....and finally the icing on the cake with bruce calling kal a dork.

SO MUCH LOVE. can't wait for more, as always. i never come away from your stories disappointed in *any* way, jen.

*bwee*

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Date: 2009-03-23 08:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
Bruce=Flowers cracked me up, the poor guy. Glad you liked it, the confrontation was one of those scenes I've been dying to write although when I got to it it was really hard! *hugs*

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Date: 2009-03-22 10:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jeswin.livejournal.com
Wonderful! Wonderful! It makes me want to visit the civil rights museum and learn about this for real.

I loved the ending. I was waiting for it from the moment Kal hit Bruce and started castigating himself. Heck, it's been coming for several chapters, what with Kal hating himself for being Kryptonian and not human. I just knew it was only a matter of time before Batman slapped Superman upside the head and called him a dork. Even if that isn't -quite- who they are here, it felt like one of those moments.

My reaction during the confrontation started out horrified like Kal and ended up cracking up laughing like Bruce at Gor-Ko's reaction. Bruce's reaction was Batman-esque too - how many times have we seen villains standing over a "conquered" Bat who's secretly laughing at them? Despite the differences in this universe, because -we- know he's Batman, we know who's really pulling the strings. I find it interesting that Kal so desperately wants to set Bruce free, not quite getting that Bruce has been free all along - here because he chooses to be, and probably planning the whole thing.

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Date: 2009-03-23 08:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I just knew it was only a matter of time before Batman slapped Superman upside the head and called him a dork. Even if that isn't -quite- who they are here, it felt like one of those moments.

It was awfully satisfying to write that moment, somehow. Just...that sort of "Okay, you've had the angst, let's move on" feeling. :)

Bruce's reaction was Batman-esque too - how many times have we seen villains standing over a "conquered" Bat who's secretly laughing at them? Despite the differences in this universe, because -we- know he's Batman, we know who's really pulling the strings.

That really is a common scene, now that I think about it! That sort of "Muahaha, Batman, what have you to say to your total defeat?" "Look up." "Wha--THUMP." He's always a few steps ahead of everyone else... :)

How "free" Bruce is is an issue I go around and around on! Kal has an awful lot of power over him, but indeed, Bruce has willingly engineered the whole situation, so...it's a very willed and deliberate powerlessness, not passive helplessness at all.

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Date: 2009-03-23 03:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] longhairedlady.livejournal.com
This story kicks ass, love how the wider dcu comes into it (I absolutly can't wait for Diana to show up and get "married" to Clark) Friending you if you don't mind!

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Date: 2009-03-24 12:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I'm never as sure about writing the larger DCU as I am Clark and Bruce, so I'm glad they're working for you! The last two chapters in the arc have a bunch more, including Diana, so I hope you like them! :) And friend away!

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Date: 2009-03-23 05:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ilovetobefree.livejournal.com
I loved the first paragraph of this chapter. Kal‘s thoughts about his life in Smallville and his feelings about Clark as a part of him – that was amazingly written!

The second paragraph with Kal, Bruce and Touch-Me-Nots was so nice and peaceful. I felt happy for them. :)

But the next scene – OMG! That was a shock! And Kal reacted perfectly. His acting was brilliant like Bruce said. I knew he would regret and blame himself for the blow. But it seemed to be necessary to do it. He saved them all. And Bruce’s reaction (asking Kal if he hurt him) was perfect.

Kal pulled his hand back and put the lid on the balm, trying to steady his own breathing. "Are you all right?" Bruce asked. When Kal looked up in surprise, he went on with a small smile, "Did you hurt your hand on my head?" Kal didn't have time to answer before Bruce was taking his hand in his, tracing along the knuckles with exaggerated care, a feather-light touch.

Kal felt like he was falling apart, scattering to the wind, splintered with yearning. "I think I'm okay," he managed.

"Much more than okay," Bruce said, but he let go of his hand with a small smile.

Amazing! That was absolutely amazing!


Another frown creased her forehead. "We didn't feel it was necessary. What difference did it make?" She pointed to the plate of cookies as Kal gaped. "Don't let those go to waste." Then she marched out of the room.
Martha is such an amazing person in this story. Such a big support of Kal/Clark. I love her so much!

I was glad for Pete's reaction when he found out Kal's right identity. And Barbara and Ollie coming to say their goodbye – I liked the scene. Kal needs their support, IMO. As much as I know Kal/Clark he will be always vulnerable and doubting about himself. He loves to help people but he is afraid of their reaction on him when they find out the truth about him.
And you wrote this all so brilliantly!

Kal couldn't help a startled laugh. "Are you kidding? I never figured out the damn rules!" Everyone else laughed, and after a moment Pete joined in.
*Grins.*

Kal-Bruce interaction in this chapter was perfectly so done. And the last line – WOW! "Dork." *Smiles* That was great!

I enjoyed this chapter so much. :)
Thanks for sharing.

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Date: 2009-03-24 12:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
But the next scene – OMG! That was a shock! And Kal reacted perfectly. His acting was brilliant like Bruce said. I knew he would regret and blame himself for the blow. But it seemed to be necessary to do it. He saved them all. And Bruce’s reaction (asking Kal if he hurt him) was perfect.

Time in Smallville and that specific scene (and the comforting after it) was probably what got me started on this arc, so I'm glad it worked for you! It's strangely fun to have an AU where they're so closely connected and yet so tightly constrained around each other...

I was glad for Pete's reaction when he found out Kal's right identity. And Barbara and Ollie coming to say their goodbye – I liked the scene. Kal needs their support, IMO. As much as I know Kal/Clark he will be always vulnerable and doubting about himself. He loves to help people but he is afraid of their reaction on him when they find out the truth about him.

Connecting with other humans is so important to Kal in any version of him--it's why the rift between him and Selina bothers him so much, and why making friends in Smallville is so important. I was glad Pete was able to like him anyway (I was a little afraid he wouldn't, but he came through for me, lol).

I really enjoyed writing this chapter; I'm glad you liked it!

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Date: 2009-03-26 06:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rjunkie.livejournal.com
Brilliant!
Oh Kal, you clever devil you. I love that Bruce is so giddy and impressed while Kal is absolutely mortified.

Jonathan & Martha = <3

flower!bruce= :)

dork= :D

Apologies for the incoherence. Am getting sleepy.

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Date: 2009-03-27 06:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I love that Bruce is so giddy and impressed while Kal is absolutely mortified.

*grin* I suppose it's a bit insensitive of him not to realize how Kal will be feeling, but I excuse him because of the adrenaline rush he's clearly experiencing. :)

I like your sleepy comments! Reaction via emoticons for the win! :)

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Date: 2009-03-27 03:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] saavikam77.livejournal.com
Awwww!! XD Such a perfect ending to the chapter. I so love the way they get along now, how they really are growing closer.

The scene with the plantation owner was wonderfully dramatic, too. O_O Wowsa! And that Martha and Jonathan knew all along. XD So perfect.

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Date: 2009-03-28 10:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mithen.livejournal.com
I so love the way they get along now, how they really are growing closer.

It's been really difficult to write the progression into friendship with all the external problems interfering, so I'm glad to hear it's working for you. *hugs*

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